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I agree with K.kanoomtan kha.
Your grammar is not bad, but academic writing purposes the ideas and arguments kha. There are some points in addition to previous comments kha.
1. No offense, I feel like you did copy-paste the introduction (or bad rephrasing??).
2. Redundancy and wordiness should also be avoid, for example, - Bangkok is the capital city of Thailand with a large population of approximately 9 million people. - Bangkok is a capital of Thailand with approximately 9 million people.
Good sentence does not have to be long kha. You should be more concise.
3. Try not to think in Thai kha. I know it is not easy, but writing diary in English can help. An example is - I agree that this problem is serious, but there are solutions.
This is 'Thai' sentencing kha. As Khun C mentioned, they are not proper English. (I would cut it out kha because it is, anyway, unnecessary here.)
-- Do not be discouraged na kha. Your essay is not so bad, and this problem happened to most Thai students at the beginning kha.
I have been writing academically for couple years already, but it is never be perfect kha.
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