ความคิดเห็นที่ 1 Maybe your writing need to be touched up a little bit, but I would not dare do it for all the treasures of Solomon. You have said what should be said, succinctly and effectively, straight from the shoulder. Let it stand, kid. Just don't forget what you've seen and felt. Think about it. And when it's time, act on it. Meanwhile, I'll try to pass along a better place for you kids. Wish me luck. จากคุณ : แอ๊ด ปากเกร็ด - [ 25 เม.ย. 52 23:05:45 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 2 You can express your sentiment. The next thing you should do is re-read it and you can even correct a few obvious grammatical mistakes, which should make your writing even more interesting. Good writers take time to re-read and revise their writings. The first draft is usually full of mistakes. จากคุณ : K.Senior - [ 25 เม.ย. 52 23:43:22 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 3 That's a very kind of you. Before posting this, I re-read it only one time. Today I re-read again and edit it, only some grammatical mistakes can find. They are underlined. (I’m afraid I may edit from right to wrong.) I still have some problems about vocabulary. I translated some words straight from Thai. For example, hand-clap, foot-clap, rice with meat, labor-hood, etc. I’m not sure if I make any misunderstanding using those words. Most of all, I’m not good at writing in past perfect tense. It’s always confused. So, I wrote only past and past. I know it may not be a beautiful writing, but I’m glad inside that this writing can communicate my thought and my experience to someone. :) \/ \/ \/ แก้ไขเมื่อ 27 เม.ย. 52 23:03:25 จากคุณ : Tell no one - [ 26 เม.ย. 52 21:33:37 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 4 I was in the van as one of the ASEAN Summit staffs, not quite important staff. I saw a numerous number of cars passed along the side, the Red-Shirt. It was the first day they came to Pattaya. They didn't pay much attention to me and everyone in the van. We picked our cell-phone to take their pics. I stared at them interestingly, they smiled back. Some shook their heart-clap and foot-clap. Nice pics... One of my friends asked a man on the pick-up if he can give her his heart-clap, he took some time to decide. Then, he gave it.           Along the way, I saw the men, the women, the olds, and the youngs. Some were standing on the pick-ups and trucks, some went by their own car--expensive car, some were on their motorcycles. Some stopped to eat their lunch, rice with meat or some easy-made dishes  (I don't really know), in banana leaf wrapped.           Some ate rice and curry or noodle at the bistros along the street. Their destination was the same as mine..............................  the real democracy. No!! Not at that moment!!! I was working!!!! It was Royal Cliff Beach Resort. The van was stuck in front of the road to the hotel. There was a huge crowd, and a huge green bus obstructed the way I had to get off and walk..... I was walking with them, the Red-Shirt. As a student, in black suit, wearing a nametag, a staff of the conference they were going to hamper. I was scared. Nevertheless, nothing happen. I didn't see any drunk, junky or barbaric guy. I just saw an ordinary people in red shirts walking, acclaiming, and clapping their clappers. I just saw them received the bottles of water, simple water as we drink every day. They handed them out from the ice containers, and, of course, the bottles were sealed. It was not that the Red-Shirt got some drug in the buckets of water like my father told me "It's said that...." when I came back. I arrived at the hotel safely and just on time. The police and the soldier blocked the muster's way. I was standing in front of them by that time, opposite so. The mainstay said on the microphone "we don't mean to stop the summit" "but we just want to let the other leaders know that.." "..they are going to have a meeting with someone Thai people didn't choose him to be the prime minister" "..and with the government that didn't come from the election" and so on...... I saw the Red-Shirt did what they said They open the way when the leaders' motorcade came. And, after sending their document to the leaders  they went back. That night, I was in the van again... passed the hotel I saw a crowd..... This time there were the blue-shirts and the black-shirts with the labor-hood cover their face. They were armed I saw the bats  .. I saw the wedges  .. I saw the billets  .. I saw the guns  .. Those men look so awful and...inhuman My friend phoned his father immediately to ask about the news. His father told him that those people were there to brush away the Red-Shirt. I felt so terrible..... What's going on!? That night I can't sleep .............. Next morning, my mom phoned me so early She said "Don't go to Royal Cliff today" "Why not? I have to work" I replied drowsily. "Your father's friend who is a ....... told us that they will ‘clear up’ today," my mom said seriously. "They mustn't do that!!" I exclaimed "They mob said they will not stop the conference!" "We have to go ahead!"   I didn't know what was happen last night and what was happen the day they got into the hotel, too, as my mother disallowed me to go there. What I could do was just sit and watch the TV. I was standing there yesterday; the front door, and the second floor, the place the Red-Shirt broke in. The news showed the same video time to time and stated more violent than it had to be. I felt so confused. Is the adults have known before that the summit will end like this? Should I believe in the news, or what I saw with my very own eyes? Should I say what I know? Should I reveal what I saw? Should I risk my opportunity? Will my family suffer from that? I wouldn't like to talk about taking side...... I feel so sorry for the Red-Shirt. And I am confused Just “feeling sorry” is ALL I can do???? (I translated this sentence form Thai style. I know it isn’t the question form, but I don’t know how to write correctly in this meaning.) I don't know. จากคุณ : Tell no one - [ 26 เม.ย. 52 21:34:19 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 5 Thank you so much, K. แอ๊ด and K. K. Senior. Ps. K. แอ๊ด, your reply makes me feel warm that at least there are still some adults like you in this country :) จากคุณ : Tell no one - [ 26 เม.ย. 52 21:37:24 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 6 Well, kiddo. That's what all of us should do. After all we are here in this world only fleetingly and the least we can do is to try to leave this place as clean and tidy as possible for the next occupants, meaning you. Now back to business. In general, you have managed to convey powerfully what you wanted to say and that's the beauty of your writing. I don't want to change it but since you are trying to perfect your writing I would try to point out certain things that might help. I will go through line by line. I was in the van as one of the ASEAN Summit staffs, not quite important staff. >> I was in a van as one of the ASEAN Summit staffs, a not quite important one. ( *** Do not leave out the article "a" here and using "one" sounds better than repeating the word "staff" again.) I saw a numerous number of cars passed along the side, the Red-Shirt. >> I saw numerous cars passing by us, the Red Shirts. It was the first day they came to Pattaya. They didn't pay much attention to me and everyone in the van. >> *** You're doing fine here. We picked our cell-phone to take their pics. >> We picked up our cell-phones to take their pictures. I stared at them interestingly, they smiled back. >> I stared at them with interest, they smiled back. Some shook their heart-clap and foot-clap. >> Some shook their heart-shaped and foot-shaped clappers. Nice pics... One of my friends asked a man on the pick-up if he can give her his heart-clap, he took some time to decide. Then, he gave it. >> One of my friends asked a man on a pickup truck if he can give her his heart-clapper. He took some time to decide then gave it to him/her. (*** I don't know whether your friend is a he or a she. Pick the appropiate one.)         Along the way, I saw the men, the women, the olds, and the youngs. >> Along the way I saw them; men and women, old and young. Some were standing on the pick-ups and trucks, some went by their own car--expensive car, some were on their motorcycles. >> Some were standing on pickup or larger trucks, some went by in expensive cars and some were on motorcycles. (*** Well, after all we don't really know if those vehicles were their own, do we?) Some stopped to eat their lunch, rice with meat or some easy-made dishes  (I don't really know), in banana leaf wrapped.           Some ate rice and curry or noodle at the bistros along the street. >> Some stopped to eat their lunch; rice with jerky beef or some similar, easy-to-make dishes wrapped in banana leaf. I didn't really know what they ate. Some ate at the rice and curry or the noodle shops by the wayside. Their destination was the same as mine..............................  the real democracy. No!! Not at that moment!!! I was working!!!! It was Royal Cliff Beach Resort. >> It was the Royal Cliff Beach Resort. แก้ไขเมื่อ 26 เม.ย. 52 23:27:51 จากคุณ : แอ๊ด ปากเกร็ด - [ 26 เม.ย. 52 23:24:53 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 7 The van was stuck in front of the road to the hotel. There was a huge crowd, and a huge green bus obstructed the way. >> There was a huge crowd and a huge green bus was obstructing the way. I had to get off and walk ..... I was walking with them, the Red-Shirts. As a student, in black suit, wearing a nametag, a staff of the conference they were going to hamper. I was scared. Nevertheless, nothing happen. >> Nevertheless, nothing happened. I didn't see any drunk, junky or barbaric guy. I just saw an ordinary people in red shirts walking, acclaiming, and clapping their clapper. >> I just saw ordinary people in red shirts walking, cheering and clapping their clappers. I just saw them received the bottle of water, simple water as we drink every day. >> I just saw them receiving bottles of water, the simple water we drink every day. They handed them out from the ice container, and, of course, the bottle were seal. >> The bottles were handed out from iceboxes and, of course, the bottles were sealed. It was not that the Red-Shirt got some drug in the bucket of water like my father told me "It's said that...." when I came back. >> It was not true that the Red Shirts were doped by the buckets of water they drank the way my father told me when I came back. He told me "It's said that blahblahblah..." I arrived at the hotel safely and just on time. The police and the soldier blocked the muster's way. >> The police and the soldier were blocking the demonstrators' way. I was standing in front of them by that time, opposite too. >> By that time I was standing opposite from them. The mainstay said on the microphone "we don't mean to stop the summit" >> The leader of the demonstrators were speaking on the microphone "We don't want to stop the summit." "But we just want to let the other leaders know that.." "they are going to have a meeting with someone Thai people didn't choose him to be the prime minister" "..they are going into a meeting with someone that the Thai people has not chosen to be the prime minister.." "and with the government that didn't come from the election" "..and with the government that has not been elected.." and so on...... I saw the Red-Shirt did what they said .. They open the way when the leaders' motorcade came >They opened the way when the leaders' motorcades came And, after sending their document to the leaders  they went back >>And, after presenting their documents to the leaders, they went back That night, I was in the van again... passed the hotel I saw a crowd..... This time there were the blue-shirts and the black-shirts with the labor-hood cover their face. >>This time there were the Blue Shirts and the Black Shirts with laborer's hoods covering their faces. They were armed I saw the bat .. >> I saw the sticks/clubs. (*** What exactly did you see? Pick the appropriate one.) I saw the wedge .. >> *** What kind of weapon is THAT? Clarify. I saw the billet .. >> *** You mean the "bullets", don't you? I saw the gun .. >> I saw the guns. (*** Surely there were not only one gun!!!) Those men look so awful and...inhuman. My friend phoned his father immediately to ask about the news. His father told him that those people were there to brush away the Red-Shirt. >> His father told him that those people were there to clear away the Red Shirts. I felt so terrible..... What's going on!? That night I can't sleep .............. >> That night I coulddn't sleep. Next morning, my mom phoned me so early >> Next morning, my mom phoned me very early. She said "Don't go to Royal Cliff today" "Why not? I have to work" I replied drowsily. "Your father's friend who is a ....... told us that they will ‘clear up’ today," my mom said seriously. "They mustn't do that!!"  "They mob said they will not stop the conference!" "We have to go ahead!" >> "The mob said..." I didn't know what was happen last night and what was happen the day they got into the hotel, too, as my mother disallowed me to go there. >> I didn't know what happened that night and what happened the day they got into the hotel as my mother did not allow me to go there. What I could do was just sit and watch the TV. I was standing there yesterday; the front door, and the second floor, the place the Red-Shirt broke in. The news showed the same video time to time and stated more violent than it had to be. >> The news kept showing the same video over and over and stated there was more violence than it really was. I felt so confuse. >> I felt so confused. Is the adults have know before that the summit will end like this? >>Did the adults know beforehand that the summit will end like this? Should I believe in the news, or what I saw with my very own eyes? >>Should I believe in the news or should I believe in what I have seen with my very own eyes? Should I say what I know? Should I reveal what I saw? Should I risk my opportunity? Will my family suffer from that? >> Should I risk my future? I wouldn't like to talk about taking side...... >> I don't like to talk about taking sides. I feel so sorry for the Red Shirts. And I am confused Just “feeling sorry” is ALL I can do???? I don't know. แก้ไขเมื่อ 27 เม.ย. 52 06:33:03 จากคุณ : แอ๊ด ปากเกร็ด - [ 27 เม.ย. 52 00:10:18 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 8 ..ยังมีที่ผิดอีกเยอะจริงๆ ด้วย ^^' ขอบคุณมากๆ เลยนะคะ wedge ตั้งใจจะสื่อถึง ไม้กอล์ฟ ส่วน billet ท่อนเหล็ก จิ้มดิกออนไลน์จากไทยไปอังกฤษเอาน่ะค่ะ -_-' จากคุณ : Tell no one - [ 27 เม.ย. 52 22:59:38 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 9 ในที่นี้ก็ใช้ golf club ไปเลย ไม่ใช่ wedge เพราะจะไม่มีใครรู้เรื่อง และทำนองเดียวกัน ถ้าจะบอกว่าท่อนเหล็กก็ใช้ iron bars หรือไม่ก็ชะแลง crowbar ไปโน่นให้ชัดเจน จากคุณ : แอ๊ด ปากเกร็ด - [ 27 เม.ย. 52 23:08:53 ]

ความคิดเห็นที่ 10 อ่อ อย่างนี้นี่เอง ^^ ตอนแรกก็พยายามหาคำน่ะค่ะ แต่แบบนี้เข้าใจง่ายกว่าเยอะเลย ขอบคุณนะคะ :D จากคุณ : Tell no one - [ วันแรงงาน 17:41:31 ]