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Original: The objectives of this study were examine ...
Revised: The objectives of this study were to examine ...
Revised: This study examined (and investigated) ...
Tip: Focus on the actor and the action.
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Original: To achieve these objectives, interviewing experiences eating Thai food was developed.
Revised: To achieve these objectives, we interviewed 100 people, asking for thier experiences with Thai food.
Tip: To do something, a *human/animal* does X. An inanimate subject (experiences) can't perform an action.
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Original: The findings of the analysis presented here will be concentrated on the 12 categories of perceptions and attitudes as derived from data ...
Revised: In presenting the findings, we classified perceptions and attitudes into 12 categories.
Tip: Minimize the use of the passive.
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Original: ...and she would like to come back to the restaurant in the future because she had favorite Thai restaunt.
Revised: ...and she would like to return to the restaurant in the future because it was one of her favorites.
Tip: Pick the verb that best conveys your thought. She didn't want to "have" (had) a favority Thai restaurant.
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Original: Restaurant image comprises food quality ; menu variety ; cleanliness ; price;
Revised: Food quality, menu variety, dleanliness, and price comprise the image of a restaurant.
Tips:
--The revised version emphasizes the elements of a good restaurant, which seems to be your focus, right?
--Unless you have a long, confusing list, you don't need semi-colons; colons work just fine. Google, using the keyword "how to use semi-colon" and you'll find, I hope, some examples.
Just my two cents, krub :)
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