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Usefulness of making (practicing) meditation

To make meditation consists of at least 3 advantages. To be ready to study effectively is the first advantage of making meditation. When you are practicing it, you need to pay attention on it. This is why you are studying a lesson you will concentrate on it carefully and seriously (Vajiramedhi, 2010). While doing it, your mind will be a unit, and you can create something new without complexity (Inthaphanyo, 1990). To rescue diseases is the next benefit of meditative practice. To make meditation is one of the best ways to heal the hypertension easily, safely and effectively without any risks (Anderson, 2008). Making meditation can, moreover, make a doer of meditation feel fresh and happy; this means the doer who has a heart disease will be treated by making meditation and prevented from heart disease (Triamchaisri & Snider, 2009). A research by Laohawanich and Tengtraisorn (2009) reported that a new safe way to treat cancer is meditation because it is able to make a practitioner feel good. This feeling causes endorphins, and when a patient feel good every system of body will work well. This is why the cancer will be treated (Laohawanich & Tengtrisorn, 2009). Then meditation is still the basic method to enlighten the nirvana. Firstly, a performer needs to know the forth noble truths before he practices meditation. Then he will perform meditation as the Tripitakas in which the ways are noted. Finally, the more he tries to practice meditation, the easier opportunity to enlighten the nirvana he will reach (Payutto, 2005). As a result, one of the best ways to study effectively, to treat many of diseases, and to enlighten the nirvana is making meditation properly.



ประโยคที่ผิด
This is why you are studying a lesson you will concentrate on it carefully and seriously (อาจารย์ให้เขียนใหม่ทั้งประโยค)
While doing it, your mind will be a unit, and you can create something new without complexity (Inthaphanyo, 1990).(your mind will be a unit อันนี้ผิด)
To make meditation is one of the best ways to heal the hypertension easily, safely and effectively without any risks (Anderson, 2008).(without any risks อันนี้อาจารย์บอกซ้ำซากตัดดีไหม?)
A research by Laohawanich and Tengtraisorn (2009) reported that a new safe way to treat cancer is meditation because it is able to make a practitioner feel good.(it is able to make อาจารย์บอกให้เปลี่ยน)
Finally, the more he tries to practice meditation, the easier opportunity to enlighten the nirvana he will reach (Payutto, 2005)(อันนี้เกือบถูกแต่ก็ให้เขียนใหม่)
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