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รบกวนหน่อยนะคะ คนใจดีทั้งหลาย ไม่เน้นแกรมม่าถูกต้องเพราะขอทุนเรียนภาษาอังกฤษอยู่แล้ว อ่อน แหะๆ ช่วยชี้จุดที่อ่านแล้วงง ลำดับของเนื้อเรื่อง หรือจุดอ่อนของเนื้อเรื่องทีค่ะ หรือศัพท์ไหนทำหน้าที่แปลกๆ บางทีนึกไม่ออกเปิดดิกเอาใช้ศัพท์ใหม่ หรือจะแนะนำอะไรก็ยินดีหมดค่ะ ... เอ่อ ไม่รู้ว่าเนื้อหามันดราม่าไปไหม แต่มันเป็นความจริงหมดนะ แหะๆ
I was a dreamer, to accomplish the peak of life, to be wealthy, be celebrated in this society is my goal.I deeply believed I'm special. I learn fast and gifted with creativities. This was me, before I came to realize I was just a dull, narrow worldview person who sank into arrogancy.
My brother is a very intelligence person. He's a high rank student who expected to receive an honour. Oneday he started to bend away to something other than studying. Enrolling in a community is the reason.His personality, his perspective, his behavior...his whole had been all changed.
If you are still walking in such a way, you will find your temptation turn out zero.There are tons of superiors outside, better over the best. Never is when you reach the peak. This sentence he had on me insist me to think he's already got his brainwashed,I ignored him.
Unexpectedly that there would be a time I have to work with my brother's club. I was volunteering on a camp. Held kids activities and gave education to aboriginal children. At that time I am the one who was given. I find something much different from my society. There was a party, coworkers, who are best with sincere, warmth and sacrifice. They stunned me with a huge impression. Their great goodness I've ever met and their beautiful way of life made me realize how ridiculous I was. They got all my heart.
Have you ever lie down the earth to watch up to the sky? It made me feel empty and questions about life spring up over my head.Sometimes I feel tired dealing with people. In this wild society, why do I have to survive? Why do I have to live this hard life, to be rich? and die?
And have you ever look down to the earth? Imagine I was on a satellite. The image shows my weakness. I'm no one. I'm just one of the 6.97 billion people on this planet.Never to the peak but close to meaningless. This is how I jumped into conclusion, I would change my life.
Beginning with a tiny role in communities both outside and inside the University even more ensured me this is my lifelong responsibility, to illuminate people's lives and implant social change. Recently, I have a chance to met up with an internee family(Unexpected expired visas). Poor Somalian couple was imprison for 3 years with their two little kids. No organization hand out help before. We were the first who tried to bail them out. Though I was just there carrying the alms and have a little talk with them,
Inexplicable happiness was blooming in my heart as their faces show delights when they met us. Every experiences working on this way, I kept them all my precious memories.
I'm not an almoner, I'm an art student. I believe Arts play a major role in influencing people lives. Impact the way of thought widely. This is how socialistic spread out to the world. I intend to use my design skill as a media to make a difference in society, sparks people awareness how humanity distinction and conflict continue to occur and are growing around the world. I want to light them a better path of life. Be an inspiration to someone inherite to value society as someone had inspired me. I confidently say I can. People change into this way all the time.
This passion incite me to take more concentrate in my study. I got accepted to XXX University,The most renowned institute of Arts and Design in Thailand and was awarded an outstanding achievement grant this year.I planned to gain higher education in Visual Communication Design. And to be talented enough to explore my media internationally, I need to pursue my graduate study in America, The country that visual design takes great influence to the world.
I couldn't bear to take a step-to-step of education. I couldn't bear to store my skill preparing just for the ideal rising future. Yes,I will be studying forever, but I'm in a hurry .I'm already working, I want to make perfect as soon as I can because today or tomorrow a plane might fall over my house's roof,who knows? It could happen.Everything has its own possibility. This is why I want to win a scholarship for my aim education in USA as soon as possible after my BFA graduation ,then English became vital issue. As you see my English right now are not skillful enough to get a good TOELF/IELT score.
I've few times taken English grammar courses. Reading big grammar books. I found it help me improve very little compared to the amount I've read. I found real using works with me better. Big improvement comes from variety of English contents I read in the internet. Responding others and take parts in reaction in the topics I interested. Youtube is always my best source to practice my listening.
However, I still lack the chance of speaking.
There are some great English school in Thailand but their tuition is as high as taking a short course in a high standard English education country. A month expense includes tuition, accommodation and air tickets etc. costs almost ten times I spend in Bangkok.Studying abroad without scholarship is like a dream to me.
Do not watch up the superiors but to look down the inferiors(in social standard) My brother. In this world of racing. People are competing to become higher than others. Most of them are filled with ego, arrogance and live extravagancy at the time parts of the world are facing hardness, starving and in poverty, somewhere are dreaded by war .they are still closing their eyes.My perspective cross the stereotype.My world view has completely changed.
I used to be a dreamer. I had passion that pushed me climbing forward to reach my dream. But I give up dreaming, I woke up to reality and now working in a way that leads by ideology. more passionate and stronger.
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